Poem im 14 so just wondering is this any good ? thanks !?
SOLAR FRIENDS
Like every day of our lives the sun falls and the moon raises
our friend ship needs a rest to start fresh in the morning
we both are stars in a sky but not one shines brighter then the next
we are both equal. Friend ship is an equal amount of effort
trust, support, communication, loyalty, understanding, empathy
if one star is over worked it explodes
if we don’t keep our friend ship equal it will explode
sometimes unfixable and others may be easier to put back together
Every time you explode a piece of the friend ship is lost or gained
Some fights make you stronger others ruin everything
As we get older we are gods and goddesses of the universe
we get older and sometimes the revolutions we take don’t end up going the same way
but others revolve together and stay together forever
the one we may love might interfere but friends learn to deal
we hope gravity will keep us grounded but if the best of friends aren’t
there you may just float away
When our relationship Is fired up and red hot the light to our friend ship is dying out like a sun
everyone hopes to keep us blue so we can last forever and never die out
If we die out so will the beauty of nature that surrounds us
you are lost not knowing where to turn but left with nothing but your thoughts and the stars gaze at
This is not a poem it is a lot of thoughts put together.
If you want to write poetry you need to keep the thoughts tight,
you have too many words, no rhythm and it does not really grab ones attention.
Good luck in your writing attempts, practice makes perfect I was told.
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