Can somebody correct this essay for me? thank you so much!?
Saturday, October 10th, 2009We all know that people in the prehistorical period had to fighted not only with other person but also with natural resoures for existence. They had to hunt quarrys and gather fruits, even cut down trees to build houses. However, as technology improved, many people are aware of human activities have great influence on our living earth and raise a big argumentation on this issue. Some people claim that human activities are damage our living earth, the others advocate that human activity makes the earth a better place to live. In my opinion, I consider that human activities spoil our living earth seriously and we need to do something to improve this situation.
Firsty , our living earth is being harmed by human activity because people overuse natural resource in the present time. As everybody knows, the population on our earth nowadays has increase rapidly so that more people than before have to consume more food preparation and daily goods. To detailed the above description, natural resources will become less and less when population continue growing. The truth is in two hundred and five, the average atmospheric carbon dioxide concentration increased 0.6 percent over the high in two hundred and four, representing the largest annual increase ever recorded, according to the Washington-based Worldwatch Institute. In addition, an estimated twenty percent of the world’s coral reefs had been destroyed, as with twenty percent of mangrove forests. It takes 20 trees to keep one baby in disposable diapers for two years. The average life span of a cell phone is only 14 months. Every day, our planet receives enough solar energy to heat every home in the world for one year – free!
"Heal the world," urges multi-awarded singer Michael Jackson. "Make it a better place, for you and for me and the entire human race." But how ? There are many things people can do to help clean up this world we are living such as saving energy , water , paper , reuse funiture before throw them away and avoide most plastic , etc. Many tasks – like reading, writing, studying, and sewing – can be done quite comfortable by the light of a window. And using daylight offers twin benefits: It’s free and doesn’t pollute. Don’t leave the water running. A full gallon of water can run out of your kitchen faucet in less than sixty seconds! Turn off the water when brushing teeth. That will save one to two gallons of water each time your brush. . Don’t use disposable razors and blades. Since the razors are made of plastic, not only do they consume high quantities of energy and toxic chemicals during their manufacture, they don’t degrade in landfill. Use glass dishes and cups and metal silverware instead of plastic. In fact, avoid buying anything that’s plastic unless it’s extremely durable, you can use it many times over, and you have no other option. Recycle used ribbons, bows, and decorative wrappings. If you take care when people’s unwrapping their presents, they can reuse the wraps at least one time. They can store used paper and accessories in a convenient place so that they can use them for the next holiday occasion. If people can’t recycle something, they should reuse it. Buy products that will last. With plastic and glass bottles, don’t throw them away. Use them to hold leftovers in the kitchen, to hold paper clips in the office… And man can buy biodegradable products, avoid most plastics, if possible by choosing paper instead of plastic.
Thus, the Earth is hurt. Certainly, the Earth is good place to live for human. However, it is only for human. We should think about other creatures and keep the Earth healthy. We should make the Earth a better place to live for every creatures and the Earth itself. “There are ways to get there” , croons Michael Jackson. “ If you care enough for the living , make a little space , make a better place” .
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4-sorry, it needs to be completely re-written. triple space it, hand it in as a rough draft, and maybe your teacher will have one of the other students sit down with you. you have too much verbiage, you need to make more paragraphs, and an outline would certainly not hurt
i realize you are probably not using english as your primary language, but ask your tutor for help in organizing
